by cindyrae77 » Sat Dec 10, 2016 1:24 am
English note: 'his hopes got up on the child' doesn't quite make sense in English, though I think I know what you're trying to say. Something like 'he had uncharacteristically let his hopes get tangled up with the child?' Or no, you meant something else?
Also, while some definitions of 'beeline' simply give 'to go straight towards it,' there is also an intimation of 'speed' involved. "He made a beeline over to the buffet table" implies he's not only moving straight there, without stopping, he's doing that somewhat (or even very) quickly. Bee line also appears as two words in some places, in others, one. (It's the line a worker bee flies in when they are bringing nectar back to the hive.)
Onward:
The furnace rattled, and Rolley remembered the sound. The concrete floor was cold, and hard to sleep on, and Rolley remembered that, as well. The walls were cinder block, and the room wasn't insulated, since it was a place meant for the furnace, and life's cast offs, like an old rocking chair in need of sanding, that sat in the corner, or the piano. Or me, Rolley thought. He even remembered that the piano bench wasn't a proper piano bench. It had no lid to lift, and the height was even a bit "off." It was long enough to seat two, but just a little high. Rolley remembered having to reach down for the foot pedals. Pedals he could still see, now. Soft pedal. Sustain pedal, to get the sympathetic vibrations of the strings. He remembered the left one was stiffer than the right one. But as he settled a dark hand on the dusty cloth, he wasn't sure what else he remembered.
G-C-E, G-C-E...
English note: 'his hopes got up on the child' doesn't quite make sense in English, though I think I know what you're trying to say. Something like 'he had uncharacteristically let his hopes get tangled up with the child?' Or no, you meant something else?
Also, while some definitions of 'beeline' simply give 'to go straight towards it,' there is also an intimation of 'speed' involved. "He made a beeline over to the buffet table" implies he's not only moving straight there, without stopping, he's doing that somewhat (or even very) quickly. Bee line also appears as two words in some places, in others, one. (It's the line a worker bee flies in when they are bringing nectar back to the hive.)
Onward:
The furnace rattled, and Rolley remembered the sound. The concrete floor was cold, and hard to sleep on, and Rolley remembered that, as well. The walls were cinder block, and the room wasn't insulated, since it was a place meant for the furnace, and life's cast offs, like an old rocking chair in need of sanding, that sat in the corner, or the piano. [i] Or me[/i], Rolley thought. He even remembered that the piano bench wasn't a proper piano bench. It had no lid to lift, and the height was even a bit "off." It was long enough to seat two, but just a little high. Rolley remembered having to reach down for the foot pedals. Pedals he could still see, now. Soft pedal. Sustain pedal, to get the sympathetic vibrations of the strings. He remembered the left one was stiffer than the right one. But as he settled a dark hand on the dusty cloth, he wasn't sure what else he remembered.
[i]G-C-E, G-C-E...[/i]